Aet Lindling

This would be much better if you didn't force rhymes. Seems like a sweet poem and all, but it's all so awfully stilted and odd because you've tried to force ...

This is touching, written from real-life I'm guessing. Like others have said, the flow is a little jolted in places, but other than that the composition is pretty great. One ...

It becomes rather generic around the middle, which is a disappointment as it has the potential to become a light-hearted Dickinson-style word romp about the darkness inside mankind. It is ...

I hate everything you do I hate everything you say And from first sight you knew That every day You'd watch my every movement You'd watch whatever I did And ...

This has a progression of plot throughout the poem, which is rare among much of the poems in Dramatic Poetry. Starts out emo and ends optimistic. Congrats. Despite this, it ...

The colons detract from the poem as a whole, I would suggest taking them out. "But i just don't think so !" That's not very good. You don't capitalize "I", ...

You start out with a standard rhyme scheme of ABAB and then only one stanza later switch to a -A-A rhyming scheme, and then no rhyming for the third stanza, ...

Yes, yes it does, Galerius. Obviously. (Since other people have commented on the literary value of this poem, and I haven't done a nitpick in a while, I'll just nitpick ...

Decide whether or not you want this to rhyme. It rhymes in places and doesn't in others. I like the (not dear to me) repetition, it hints at something that ...

Doesn't explain enough. It leaves too much to the imagination, in a bad way. You say that someone left you, and you got all sad, and so on, and then ...

As many people have done, you have fallen into the trap of trying to hard to make your poem rhyme. Rhyme schemes don't always have to be used, most poems ...

This is pretty much exactly what I think whenever I see a robin's egg cracked open on the ground. Pretty cool poem. With that said, there are some parts that ...

You have nice imagery and descriptions, I liked "airy globes", but it seems like you don't go very far with this idea. The ending is a proper ending, don't add ...

This doesn't seem so much like a poem about death as it does an essay. You switch moods around the end, at first you're asking questions and you should find ...

This has a poor flow to it. You obviously tried to make everything rhyme, and this usually isn't advisable. Rhyming is forced by nature, and unless you can really make ...